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Post by bay on Apr 22, 2018 4:53:42 GMT
I too thought it was weird for Paul to just throw a Pokeball at Volcarona there instead of battling it. I'm also mixed with almost all of Miki's Pokemon being shinies, curious as to how she got hold of them. Otherwise I enjoyed his and Miki's intearction there. You have to admire Miki for still putting up with Paul's aggressiveness there heh.
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Post by Huikyeong on Apr 22, 2018 19:58:28 GMT
I too thought it was weird for Paul to just throw a Pokeball at Volcarona there instead of battling it. I'm also mixed with almost all of Miki's Pokemon being shinies, curious as to how she got hold of them. Otherwise I enjoyed his and Miki's intearction there. You have to admire Miki for still putting up with Paul's aggressiveness there heh. ah, I was trying to mirror when Ash was in Unova and he tried to catch a Deerling without battling it first haha. But yeah I will explain the shinies however she has a lot more Pokemon so she rotates them at times.
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Post by Huikyeong on May 4, 2018 7:11:29 GMT
"I just… think it is a waste of time," Paul started to say calmly. "It makes people and Pokémon become slackers. Believe me, I've dealt with it."
"So what you're sayin' is that affection makes people and Pokémon...slackers?" Miki asked as she came closer to him.
Paul began to take two steps ahead and turn his back towards the girl while crossing his arms. "Yes…" he said coldly. "Have a problem with it?"
"Naw man, you're not far from the truth," she started to say.
"Huh?" Paul quickly turned around as his jaw dropped. 'Is she actually… agreeing with me?' he thought to himself as he tried to shake off the surprise.
"Look, Paul, it's true that spoiling your Pokémon can make em feel entitled," Miki explained. "Sometimes they can be a pain in the butt and you might get hurt. But, it can also bring you closer to your Pokémon as well. You can still be affectionate with your Pokémon but also inflict tough love as well…"
Paul mulled on those words as he looked up to the clear skies. Thoughts of his past training came back, of how he used to be very hard on his Pokémon in order to make them powerful. 'I wish she wouldn't make me bring up such memories…' he thought as he closed his eyes, letting the gentle wind brush against his face. 'I thought she was going to give me some lecture about how I should be more friendly, however, if you put it that way… what she said makes sense.'
He then turned to Miki and stared at her for a few minutes while putting his thoughts together. 'There are so many questions I have for her, but I need to frame them properly'. The girl turned her head as she was confused as to why Paul kept staring.
"Paul?"
"...I have some questions for you," Paul said coldly.
"Okay… ask away," Miki said as she signaled Paul to walk with her around the perimeter of the ranch.
The young man proceeded to follow closely as they began to walk towards the nearby woods near the house. "Okay, for starters, why are some of your Pokémon different colors?" he asked. "Like I thought magmortar was red, but yours was pink."
"Oh yes, I do own some 'shinies' as we call them," she explained. "If you look to your 'dex. you'll know that Pokémon also have a shiny version. They are extremely difficult to catch and they take forever to breed. I've had these Pokémon since I was ten and some, like Ellie, I've had when I was much younger. Pink was my favorite color, so the pink shinies I hunted them down like crazy. My drapion, I got from a shelter though."
"You own a drapion?!" Paul asked in shock. "I also owned one as well! In fact, when I saw your Pokémon, it reminded me of the ones I raised for the Sinnoh league."
"Yes, she should be around here somewhere," the girl answered. "I raised her from a skorupi. The original trainer didn't want her so they dumped her off at the Pokémon shelter, as the same with some of my others."
"Which Pokémon did you get from the shelter?"
"My drapion, aggron, rhydon, lairon and ursaring all came from the shelter. I raised them when they were their pre-evolved forms and we have been together ever since."
Paul nodded as he was processing the information he was getting. 'She seems to really love her Pokémon' he thought to himself. 'I guess I could be more patient with mine. I still want to catch the strongest ones I could and it looks like she had that similar mindset as well!' While walking, Paul looked to his left and noticed Makuhita playing alongside the other Pokémon.
"I wonder… does that makuhita belong to you or Trip?" he asked.
"She's mine," Miki answered with confidence. "However, Tristian does help me care for some of my Pokémon just as my aunt and uncle does at times."
He once again nodded, this time in disgust at the thought of his rival. 'He was a totally different person with that electabuzz…' he thought. 'It's so weird, however, I guess he is either weird or he and this girl are close'.
"You know, what is the deal with him and that electabuzz?" Paul asked with a hint of frustration in his voice. "I thought you said that she didn't like men…"
"She doesn't," Miki started to say. "But she's known Tristan for some time. He's helped my aunt and I care for her since she was an elekid. However, even then, it took time for her to warm up to him. But as she opened her heart to him, he began to open his heart to her. They have gotten closer ever since."
As Paul was about to ask another question, the pair saw the bushes in front of them rustle back and forth. He took a step forward as a yellow and black Pokémon scurried from the bushes and appeared in front. It was a small canine Pokémon that stood on two black feet, red eyes had a yellow tail and a blue collar. While the Pokémon waved its fists as a defensive stance, Paul took out his Pokedex from his pocket to scan the mysterious creature.
"Riolu, the Emanation Pokémon," the Pokedex explained. "It uses the shapes of auras, which change according to emotion, to communicate with others."
"Interesting Pokémon," Paul started to say. "Is it yours?"
"No," Miki answered. "There are wild Pokémon living in the area and a few of the riolu around here have made Floccesy Ranch their home. Most of the ones I've seen are very stubborn."
'I think I will catch it then!' Paul thought as he reached inside his slingback and pulled out a Pokéball. He also reached into his jacket pocket to grab another Pokéball and proceeded to throw it.
"Electivire, standby for battle!" Paul said confidently while he threw his Pokéball.
That same burst of light came as Electivire emerged, once again assuming a fighting stance proudly.
"I need you to help me catch that riolu!" Paul commanded as he pointed to the riolu by the bushes, while also holding the empty Pokéball. "You ready?"
Electivire shook his head while he squinted his eyes at Paul's Pokéball. Rolling his eyes, he shook his head side to side and stared directly at Paul. The young man looked up at his Pokémon, wondering what was wrong. 'What is his problem?' he thought as he tried to shake off the confusion and call out an attack.
"Use thunder punch!" Paul commanded.
However, Electivire did not listen as he was too consumed with Paul's Pokéball. Paul put both hands far out on his sides as an impatient gesture towards his Pokémon. All the while, Electivire slowly approached Paul, snatching the Pokéball from his hands and holding it up to his face.
"What are you waiting for?" he asked impatiently while trying to retrieve the empty Pokéball. "Let's go, Electivire!"
"Um… Paul," Miki started to say. "I think Electivire is trying to tell you that you need to make your Pokéball bigger…"
'Oh no!' Paul noticed that the Pokéball was in its' travel sized state instead of its' standard size. In order to catch a wild Pokémon, the Pokéball must be in its' standard size in order for the capture to be successful. He quickly took the ball from his Pokémon's hands and quickly tried to find the button that made the Pokéball grew. 'Where is it, where IS it?' he thought to himself as he grew more nervous and anxious. He didn't even hear Electivire grunting impatiently as he tried to locate the button. Eventually, he pressed the white button on the empty ball as the size grew bigger than what it was before. It finally grew bigger than the size of his palm.
However, as Paul was about to battle the wild Pokémon. he looked up to saw that the Pokémon had already escaped. He took a few steps forward towards the bush to try to locate the riolu. He scanned the area and pulled back some of the branches on the bush, however no cigar. 'Drat!' he clenched his fists in frustration when he realized that he was too late and he once again failed at catching a Pokémon. 'You know, if Electivire would have listened…' he thought as he turned around, fuming as well as his eyes were shut tight.
"Is that how you catch a Pokémon?" a familiar voice asked from behind. "How pathetic."
Paul growled in frustration as he opened his eyes and saw his rival Trip standing a few feet behind him, along with the same electabuzz from earlier in his arms. However, Ellie was laughing in a cutesy manner, causing Electivire to blush and cross his arms in embarrassment, all the while narrowing his eyes as he turned to his trainer.
"Wait, you saw that?" Miki asked in shock.
"Sure did," Trip answered as he approached his friend. "It was not a pretty sight. Someone needs to go over the basics… badly."
Paul narrowed his eyes at the pair as he shook his head in frustration. 'I really do not want to deal with these people. Not Trip and not that stupid electabuzz…' he thought as he attempted to leave, obviously disgusted.
"Whatever," Paul said coldly as he started to walk away. "I'm out of here. I can see this is going to be something I want no part in."
As Paul started to walk away, Electivire glanced over at Ellie, who gave him a smile and a slight chuckle. He uncrossed his arms as he gently patted the electabuzz on the head. Paul turned around and proceeded to get out a Pokéball from his pocket in an attempt to return his Pokémon back to his Pokéball.
"Paul wait!" Miki said as she approached the purple haired young man. "Aren't you going to apologize to Electivire?"
"Why should I?" he asked coldly. "It's his fault that we didn't catch any Pokémon, you know."
As soon as he heard that, Electivire slowly started to approach his trainer with his fists clenched and shrouded in electricity. He growled loudly as he towered over Paul, getting close to his face in an attempt to intimidate him. Paul's heart started to beat fast as he retained his best poker face. He wanted to show Electivire that he wasn't afraid as he stood there with a scowl, not backing down. He glanced over at his Pokémon's fists for a second, while still keeping his composure. 'If he attacks me, then we will have problems…' he thought as he just stood there.
As the staring match progressed, Ellie broke free from Trip's arms and proceeded to run towards the pair, putting both hands on Electivire's forearm. Paul stood there in shock as he watched the electabuzz who was once shy now suddenly appearing to try to calm his Pokémon. She rubbed on his forearm as the electricity that surrounded Electivire's fists started to disappear. Not only that but he started to unclench his fists as well.
"Thanks, Ellie!" Miki said as she picked up the small electabuzz. "Paul, I think you may want to hash it out with Electivire before you do any gym challenge. However, your next gym challenge is in Virbank City."
"Thank you," Paul said calmly as he returned Electivire back to his Pokéball. "Also, thank you for showing me your Pokémon. I greatly appreciate it."
"Well… you are welcome to come back and see them again," she suggested. "I'm sure they will be happy to see you again."
With that, Paul waved goodbye as he smiled and went on his way to his next gym challenge in Virbank City.
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Post by illustriousrocket on May 5, 2018 19:23:51 GMT
"with not many houses" sounds better, but perhaps it would be best if was reworded slightly and didn't have the "not many houses" part at all, simply because a very small town logically would have few houses. On the other hand, though, I assume that even though this is an anime universe story you're using the game version of Veilstone City? I ask because the anime version of Veilstone is a large city.
"his" slingback.
Like I've said to you before, I like the idea that Paul trains his own body as hard as he does his Pokemon. That's something that's definitely in character for him.
And I've said this before too, but this is much too emotional for me to be able to see Paul acting. The only time I can think of him ever acting this emotional was when he exploded during his battle with Brandon, but in that case, he was pushed far further than he is here. Also, to him, Trip is not anyone of any particular importance aside from being his rival, while Brandon was the reason he became the sort of trainer he became in the first place. There was much more at stake in his mind against Brandon.
"just stared at the device." "at" is missing.
That said, this part is much more in character for him, I think.
I'm not sure how I'd do it, but this could use some rewording.
"and saw a reddish orange..." You left out "a" there.
Also, the tense is wrong in this part: "wings that resemble the sun's rays." It should be in past tense, so it should be "resembled."
Finally, in that last sentence, it should just be "Paul" and not "Paul's."
We already talked about this, but it bears repeating because of how important it is: Paul wouldn't make that mistake. I understand why you did it and what you were referencing, but this just isn't in his character.
Retorts, not resorts.
Putting that aside, I really like Miki's character. She doesn't just play off Paul well, she is entertaining on her own too.
You might as well condense these thoughts into a single line. They both repeat roughly the same information and have Paul taking the same actions, so you don't need to say it twice.
Paul should know what a Mareep is, shouldn't he? He did travel through Johto in the past, and they can be found in Sinnoh and Hoenn in certain cases, too.
Similarly to the last note, I'd think Paul would know what a shiny Pokemon is instead of thinking that it's a different Pokemon solely because of its color. That said, I guess it's not too unbelievable that he'd never have encountered one, but I still think he would know it's a Magmortar if for no other reason than he has one.
No need for "up" at the end.
I guess this isn't really wrong, per se, but it does feel like a little bit of a dramatic reaction for him.
I have a few thoughts here.
First, I still think Paul would at least know what shiny Pokemon are. Since you're in the anime universe you do have the option of using other types of color variations (like the Pink Butterfree and all the pink Pokemon on that one island in the Orange Islands), but these all appear to be the regular shiny colorations and therefore I think Paul would be able to guess that.
Next, given how incredibly rare shiny Pokemon are, that Miki has so many of them is a bit hard to believe. It's often hard to justify a character even having one shiny Pokemon in a story.
Finally, I know you gave a justification for it, but making so many of Miki's Pokemon afraid of strangers doesn't really sit well with me. That all these Pokemon would act in basically the exact same way is quite unlikely, and becomes even more unlikely when multiple of them are shiny on top of it. Basically, you have one rare occurence (shiny Pokemon) occurring multiple times to the same person, then a second rare occurence (them all being afraid of strangers) happening at the same time.
Now with all of that out of the way, I love the scene of Rampardos, Aggron and Rhydon greeting her this way. It's a great visual.
Again, Paul's been through multiple regions where these berries can be found. I think he'd know what they are.
The last bit of this chapter is pretty good overall, but this last line contains a second use of "poker face" right after the previous use, so I'd recommend finding another way to say it.
This chapter overall does need a little bit of polishing to reach its full potential, but there is a good story at its core. Miki continues to be a fun character, and her Pokemon are mostly enjoyable to read about, too. The only thing they need is some work on making their personalities a bit more distinct. Meanwhile, when it comes to Paul himself, we've talked at length already about what I think you need to do with him, so I don't think I need to repeat it here.
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Post by bay on May 6, 2018 1:51:18 GMT
Hm, part of me feels the latest chapter could've been added to your previous one since you're still continuing Paul's tour in the ranch. Yeah, I'm mixed with Paul making that pokeball mistake there. You mentioned this being a shoutout to Dawn wehn she did that mistake, but the problem with that is Paul's been through several regions already while Dawn's a beginner. I think a better approach is Paul underestimating the Riolu' power (perhaps more than one Riolu gang up on Electivire haha). I also think you should've done a bit more with Trip and Paul's interaction there. They don't need to battle, but Trip saying "get back to basics" and Paul walking away was a bit underwhelming.
There are a couple things I like about this chapter, though. I like that Paul's kinda getting the idea being affectionate but also firm with your Pokemon is fine, and it doesn't need to be one or the other. Ellie calming Electivire there is also cute and I think their interactions have potential.
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Post by Huikyeong on May 16, 2018 0:39:25 GMT
The afternoon started to roll in as Paul had finally made his way to Virbank City. It was a big city with many buildings, shacks and a lot of smog in the air. There was so much smog that it was difficult for Paul to see anything in front of him. The only building he seemed the recognize through the smog was the Pokémon Center building which had a giant flashing P on the top. 'I see the Pokémon Center, however, I'd like to find the gym' he thought as he proceeded to walk past the Pokémon Center.
While looking around, he saw a small white stand up sign that read "Pokémon GYM" in big purple letters and an arrow pointing right. Paul ran towards the sign and took an Immediate right into the large alleyway. When he turned into the corner, Paul noticed another sign pointing to a small shack-like building. In the same purple letters, it read "Pokémon GYM TEMPORARILY MOVED HERE UNTIL FURTHER NOTICE". He nodded as we went up towards the sign and up the stairs leading to the gym. However, just as he was about the open the door, the door handle quickly turned. The door quickly swung open and proceeded to hit Paul in the face, almost knocking him down.
"Hey! Watch where you're going!" a familiar voice said followed by the grunt of a Pokémon.
With the pain still ringing in his forehead, Paul opened his eyes and saw Forrest standing there with Audrey, his infernape, by his side.
"Look here, you!" Forrest started to say. "I'm going to be the strongest trainer ever! You'll see!"
Like that, Forrest and his Pokémon ran off down the alleyway. 'What a weirdo…' he thought to himself as he shook his head. However, as he looked down, Paul noticed a black and green case with a Pokéball design in the middle laying there by his feet. 'What's this?' he thought as he picked it up and opened it. As he opened it, he noticed there were two gym badges in it with a gap between the two. On the left side, there was a small fuzzy picture of Forrest and his infernape taped on the inside. However, Paul also noticed that not only did he acquire the basic badge from Aspertia City, but he had also won a badge that Paul had not seen before. It was a shiny green badge that was shaped like a leaf.
"Ugh! That kid forgot his badge!" a deep voice could be heard saying.
Paul looked up and he saw a tall man dark man, wearing a light yellow jumpsuit and cap. The man narrowed his grey eyes at the young man.
"Ah, you ain't the challenger," he remarked as he locked eyes on the badge case Paul was holding.
"Do I look like the kind of trainer that would forget his gym badge after winning a gym battle?" Paul asked in a standoffish tone.
"No, but you're holding his badge case," the tall man said. "You know him? He was the last challenger I had for this afternoon and I underestimated him. He's very dramatic, very twitchy and he won't shut up, but he's strong."
"Yeah, I know him… unfortunately," Paul answered as he shook his head. "He's some kid that's from the same town as me, that's all I know of him. However, are you the gym leader?"
"Yeah I'm the gym leader!" the man replied. "Where've you been? The name's Igloo."
Paul sighed in relief when he was for certain that he found the gym and its gym leader.
"I'm Paul from Veilstone City and I challenge you to a gym battle!" Paul announced.
"Ooo, darn man," Igloo started to say. "Look Paul, I know you took forever in a day to come here but Imma have to pass. You see, I'm acting as a sub for the original gym leader and I'm supposed to be filling in for another gym leader in Kanto. So I'm leaving tomorrow. Not sure when that other gym leader's coming back but it could be a month until she comes back from tour. That kid was my last battle."
'Hm!' Paul scowled at the thought of not being able to win a badge, especially since he had been through a lot to come here. He looked forward to winning and it wasn't going to happen. 'This was a huge waste of my time!' he thought as he shook his head and began to leave.
"But… if you want a badge...I got one," the gym leader said as he held up a purple squiggly badge in his right hand. "Take it. You're gonna need two badges to challenge the next gym from here."
Paul looked at the badge in hand. 'If I take this badge, I could be done with this city and move on right away! However, I didn't win this badge by defeating this guy, so to me, it doesn't prove anything. This badge wasn't rightfully earned.' he thought to himself as he closed his eyes. 'On the other hand, I only have one badge and I need two to go to the next town. However, this feels like a pity badge and I certainly do not need pity! I will just go to the gym in the next town and explain what happened if I cannot challenge that gym, then I will have to wait a month until the original gym leader comes back. Is that a risk I am willing to take?'
"It is a very kind offer and I am tempted to accept," Paul started to say. "But, I can't accept. I want to win my badges by defeating gym leaders, I'll just scout ahead and hope they will take a chance on me."
"Hm… wise thinking Paul," Igloo said with a smirk. He handed the badge to the young man. "Can you give this badge to that kid? He was hollering about going to the Virbank Complex."
"Sure," Paul answered as he took the badge and left.
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It took some time, but Paul finally found the Virbank Complex. It was a small industrial place with beams on top and workers sitting on them. There was also patches of grass and bushes to be seen as well but not as many. There weren't that many people on the ground beside from workers. 'How am I going to find that kid?' Paul thought to himself as he proceeded to walk into the complex.
"Outta my way, outta my way, outta my way!" a familiar voice yelled before he slammed into Paul from behind.
Before he could react, Paul suddenly fell forward towards the ground as he felt the weight of someone else on top of him. He used his forearm as a brace so his head did not hit the concrete. However, he felt a slight pain everywhere else and had a small scrape on his arm. 'Let me guess...it's him…' he thought as he proceeded to dust himself off and get up from the floor. The weight on his back quickly went away as well.
"Hey, stop bumping into me!" the voice said in a standoffish tone.
Paul quickly turned around to see Forrest and his infernape standing behind him.
"You were the one who bumped into me!" Paul asserted.
"Eh, whatever," Forrest said. "Because I'm going to be a Pokémon master!"
"Well, most Pokémon masters I know do not leave a gym without their gym badge," Paul said as he held up the Virbank gym badge along with Forrest's badge case. "Or their badge cases…"
Forrest's jaw dropped when he saw that Paul had both his badge and case in his hand. He quickly felt his pockets and sure enough, he realized that he forgot his case. He quickly went up to Paul and snatched both items from his hand.
"Hmph! Thief!" he yelled with a scowl. "You oughta be arrested!"
"Huh? I didn't steal anything," Paul retorted as he raised his voice in frustration. "You left it at the gym and I'm just bringing it back to you. You're welcome…"
"I know why you took it," Forrest started to say as he smirked. "You wanted to seem strong!"
"WHAT DID YOU SAY?!" Paul yelled as he shook his fists at the green haired young man.
"I want to be stronger to," Forrest explained. "During my Sinnoh journey, I've been not only doing gym battles but I've done contests as well. When I came to Unova, I've been battling trainers and Pokémon like crazy. My goal is to be strong, as strong as Trip!"
'Trip?' Paul thought of the first battle he ever had with Trip and how he lost miserably and brutally. How he made fun of him because of where he was from and his battling skills. He thought of him made Paul very upset as he clenched his fists in anger. 'I'm pretty sure that Trip is a strong trainer, however, I wouldn't strive to be like him. He's just a stuck up person' Paul thought as he unclenched his fists. 'Forrest just became a trainer two years ago. He doesn't know any better yet. He thinks he does'.
"Well, I guess," Paul started to say. "However, I think you should be as strong as you can be, not like other trainers. You know?"
However, as Forrest was about to answer him, they heard a very loud rustling sound behind them. The young men both turned and started to run towards the sound, with Audrey following behind. They ran for about five minutes until they noticed that on the left side of the complex, a small-sized bush was shaking back and forth. They stopped and started to tiptoe quietly near the bush.
"Pokémon?" Paul whispered as he started to pull out his Pokédex in his left hand and a Pokéball in the right hand.
"Hey! I saw it first!" Forrest exclaimed as he and Audrey proceeded to walk in front of Paul.
"Ugh, no way!" Paul shouted while throwing up his Pokéball. "I haven't caught a Pokémon yet! Archen, standby!"
"Birdster! It's showtime!" Forrest also proceeded to throw a Pokéball in the air.
However, Paul looked over and noticed that Forrest's Pokéball looked different. It was light blue with a yellow X symbol in the middle. A red light emerged from Paul's Pokéball while a blue light emerged from Forrest's. The light disappeared after a few seconds as Archen emerged from the red light, assuming a battle stance. From the blue light, emerged a small grey bird Pokémon with a large white heart marking underneath its head and black stripes on its wings. Paul proceeded to pull out his Pokédex and scan the bird.
"Pidove, the Tiny Pigeon Pokémon," the Pokédex explained. "These Pokémon live in cities. They are accustomed to people. Flocks often gather in parks and plazas."
"What's that Pokéball you have?" Paul asked as he lowered his Pokédex.
"Oh, this is a quick ball!" Forrest exclaimed. "You can use it to catch Pokémon early into the battle. I used it to catch Birdster and I didn't need to battle it first so it worked better. Jen told me about it when we went to Floccesy Ranch, however, she also said that they don't work well on stronger Pokémon and that it works best when the battle begins. I bought it at the Pokémart."
The bushes were still shaking until a Pokémon came out. It was a small yellow and black striped Pokémon with two legs and arms and a body that was shaped like a plug. Its horns resembled the prongs to a power plug. Shaking his head, proceeded to return Archen back to its Pokéball and out the ball back into his pocket.
"Cool Pokémon!" Forrest exclaimed as he ran towards the mysterious Pokémon. "Where's my Pokédex?"
"It's just an elekid," Paul said in an annoyed tone as his slide his Pokédex in his pocket. "No use scanning it."
While Forrest was looking through his pockets to find his Pokédex, Paul noticed Audrey coming up behind her trainer, holding a long grey device which appeared to be a Pokédex. Forrest turned around and took the device from his Pokémon. 'At least he got the newest model…' Paul thought to himself as he gave a slight smile.
"Thanks Audrey, you're the best," Forrest said as he hugged his infernape. "Ok time to see what Pokémon you are…"
Forrest proceeded to left up his Pokédex to scan the mysterious Pokémon.
"Elekid, the Electric Pokémon," the Pokédex explained. "Spinning its arms around to generate electricity makes the area between its horns shine light blue."
"I want to catch that Pokémon if you don't mind," Forrest asked.
"Go for it," Paul replied. "I already have an electric type. So no need for another. There's something I have to do anyway, carry on."
Paul walked away from the trio as he proceeded to take out a Pokéball from his pants pocket. Once he stopped near the exit, he held the ball away from him and pressed the white button in the middle, letting out his Pokémon. As the right light went away, Electivire emerged still upset from earlier. He glanced over at Paul before turning his head the opposite direction and crossing his arms.
"Are you still mad?" Paul asked as he came closer to his Pokémon.
Electivire answered with a low 'hmph' sound while shaking his head yes.
"Are you upset that we didn't catch a Pokémon?" Paul asked sternly while lowering his eyebrow. "You know, if you would have just fired off attacks like I said, we would have gotten a Pokémon. You see, Electivire, I don't think you understand your role. I command the attacks, you fire off the attacks. Do you want to beat Trip? Remember our promise?"
Electivire turned and stared at his trainer with his arms still crossed. Paul started to reminisce about the night before the Aspertia City gym battle. How he and Electivire promised that they were going to work harder. 'If you work harder, I will work harder. We can beat him. I promise you'. Those echoed in Paul's head as he stood his ground. Then, Paul's eyes got bigger as he looked towards the exit. 'That electabuzz!' he thought as he narrowed his eyes. 'Ever since that electabuzz came into the picture, Electivire hasn't been working hard' he thought as he shook his head. 'Something must be done!'
"I need you to forget about that little electabuzz okay?" Paul asked in a calm voice. "I know you think she's pretty but I need you to focus and if I want to be honest, she's been distracting you."
Electivire uncrossed his arms as he just stared at Paul. His red eyes narrowed as his left fist was shrouded in electricity. Paul was ready to be hit, however, Electivire instead punched the ground, causing it to shake. Paul was trying his best to keep his balance as the ground wobbled and shaken beneath him. 'That was impressive!' Paul thought as he gasped in surprise. However, before he could say anything, the young man heard a high pitched giggling noise up ahead. Before he could look up, he also heard the sound of screaming along with something hitting the ground. Paul looked and he saw Ellie, on the ground trying to shake the dirt off of her fur.
"Figures…" Paul mumbled as he crossed his arms.
As Paul proceeded to approach Ellie, she looked up at him with terror in her eyes. She tried her best to back away from him as she ran behind Electivire and hid behind him.
"Look, little electabuzz," Paul said in a stern tone. "This is a conversation between me and Electivire. You're a nuisance! Go away!"
Electivire proceeded to place his body between Paul and Ellie, putting his arm right in front of the frightened electabuzz. It took awhile for Paul to register what was happening. Electivire was protecting Ellie from Paul. He shook in anger as his entire body was covered in electricity. Paul was not afraid, but rather he was surprised. 'I've never seen him so angry before. What did I do?' he thought to himself as he just stood there. Electivire growled at him, and it sounded like a motorboat.
"Hey what's going on?" Forrest could be heard asking as he approached Paul.
Ellie looked up at the larger Pokémon, seeming to be impressed with how powerful he was. She smiled as she proceeded to place her hands on Electivire's arm and squeezed it. This caused Electivire to stop growling and the electricity that surrounded his body disappeared. He turned to her as he nodded his head and held her hand. With Ellie in tow, Electivire used his tails to grab on to the beam that was over the complex and used it to hoist himself up. He then leaped off the bean and out of the complex. Paul and Forrest ran out of the complex and looked to their right. From there, they spotted Ellie and Electivire getting on a boat with a sign in front of it that read 'BOATS TO CASTELIA CITY. LAST BOAT LEAVES VIRBANK CITY AT 20:00'.
With no time to waste, Paul waved to Forrest as he began to attempt to catch the last boat. The sky was almost darkening and Paul was getting tired. However, this was a new place and Electivire could get lost. Paul waited in line anxiously for the next boat to arrive.
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Post by bay on May 17, 2018 2:26:10 GMT
Interesting you have Roxie not available at this time, which makes sense with her being a rockstar and all. Yeah I think Paul would rather get the badge the proper way instead of given away to him like that. Oh dear over Ellie coming back and now the cause of conflict between Paul and Electivire. Looking forward to what happens in Castelia City.
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